This speech has issues, but I decided to post it to learn from my mistakes.

Here are my critiques:

Style:

• The presentation was choppy. I could have practiced more to smooth it out.
• Asking people to visualize multiple scenarios was probably too complicated. I should have replaced it with one mini-story or something similar.
• I should have paused longer after asking people to choose their favorite scenario.
• I used some filler words: um, like, etc.

Content:

I should have clarified that my claim is not that we should always give people in our presence our attention. It’s more like all else being equal we should give people in our presence attention instead of those we’re connected to digitally.